Dialogue

Ask a teacher for useful feedback in French: a B1 dialogue

Ask about one unclear link in your writing, request an example and explain your revision. Practise a focused feedback conversation in French.

In short

Name one point: Pourriez-vous vérifier le lien entre ces deux idées ? Ask the teacher to show the problem, then check your revision: Est-ce que cette version exprime mieux mon idée ?

Yellow the idea to rememberBlue French to learn

A learner and teacher discuss a completely blank open notebook at a classroom desk.
Lina asks for un exemple de formulation during feedback. Illustration: Atelier

Lina has written about taking the bus. She wants to present two advantages, but her connector makes the second sound like a result of the first. In practice mode, take Lina’s part: ask, clarify, revise and check.

Your lines are hidden in practice mode. Say them aloud, then reveal to compare.
  1. You

    J’ai rédigé mon paragraphe. Pourriez-vous vérifier le lien entre mes deux arguments ?

    Say your paragraph is written and ask about the link between your arguments.

    English

    I’ve written my paragraph. Could you check the link between my two arguments?

  2. Teacher

    Oui. Quelles phrases voulez-vous regarder ?

    English

    Yes. Which sentences would you like to look at?

  3. You

    Celles-ci : « Avec mon abonnement, le bus me coûte moins cher que la voiture. Donc, je peux lire pendant le trajet. »

    Point to the two sentences and read them to the teacher.

    English

    These: “With my season ticket, the bus costs me less than the car. So I can read during the journey.”

  4. Teacher

    Le mot « donc » annonce une conséquence. Est-ce bien le lien que vous voulez exprimer ?

    English

    The word “so” introduces a consequence. Is that the relationship you want to express?

  5. You

    Non, je voulais présenter un autre avantage. Pouvez-vous me donner un exemple de formulation ?

    Explain your intended meaning and ask for an example.

    English

    No, I meant to present another advantage. Can you give me an example of how to phrase it?

  6. Teacher

    Vous pouvez écrire : « En plus, je peux lire pendant le trajet. »

    English

    You can write: “Besides, I can read during the journey.”

  7. You

    D’accord. « En plus » ajoute une idée ; « donc » présente une conséquence. C’est bien ça ?

    Explain the difference back to the teacher.

    English

    All right. “Besides” adds an idea; “so” presents a consequence. Is that right?

  8. Teacher

    Oui, exactement.

    English

    Yes, exactly.

  9. You

    Est-ce que cette nouvelle version exprime mieux mon idée ?

    Ask whether the revised version expresses your idea better.

    English

    Does this new version express my idea better?

  10. Teacher

    Oui, le lien est plus clair maintenant.

    English

    Yes, the link is clearer now.

  11. You

    Merci. Quel point devrais-je travailler ensuite ?

    Thank the teacher and ask for your next focus.

    English

    Thank you. What should I work on next?

  12. Teacher

    Ajoutez un exemple précis après votre premier argument.

    English

    Add a specific example after your first argument.

doncso / therefore

Focus: a consequence of the previous idea

J’ai raté le bus, donc je suis arrivé en retard.
I missed the bus, so I arrived late.

en plusbesides / also

Focus: an additional point

Le bus passe près de chez moi. En plus, il est direct.
The bus passes near my home. Besides, it’s direct.

Ask about a different part of your work
Your difficultyA focused request
An unclear sentencePouvez-vous me montrer quelle phrase est difficile à suivre ?
A general commentQuand vous dites « à développer », que manque-t-il ?
Choosing what to revise firstQuel point devrais-je corriger en priorité ?
Checking a revisionEst-ce que cet exemple répond à votre remarque ?
Question 1No account needed
Which relationship did Lina intend?

Choose one answer.

Answer and explanation

An additional advantage.. Lina says je voulais présenter un autre avantage. She is adding a point.

Question 2No account needed
A teacher says an idea needs developing. Which question asks for a specific next step?

Choose one answer.

Answer and explanation

Pouvez-vous préciser ce que je dois ajouter ?. Ce que je dois ajouter asks the teacher to identify the missing detail.